Wednesday, 5 February 2020

dawn trickles
between
concrete clouds

Comment by Fay Aoyagi:
'trickle' is an interesting word, but I am not really sure about the last line.   I may not like the word 'concrete'
city of concrete
dawn trickles
between clouds

Hmm...   I tried to save 'concrete,' but the first line above is not very good...   I bet you can come up with a better one!
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