between
concrete clouds
Comment by Fay Aoyagi:
'trickle' is an interesting word, but I am not really sure about the last line. I may not like the word 'concrete'
city of concrete
dawn trickles
between clouds
Hmm... I tried to save 'concrete,' but the first line above is not very good... I bet you can come up with a better one!
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