summer rain
swallows swooping
foot in a puddle
I submitted this following a 'when, what, where, prompt on 'sharing haiku knowledge' on facebook and receive the comment from Bee Jay:
"Usually a haiku contains one cut and two grammatical units. Your example reads like a list, unless you are showing us some swallows swooping somebody's foot in a puddle. Is that what you are showing us?"
Grateful to receive the comment I amended to:
summer rain
with swallows swooping
foot in a puddle
Here I record my own efforts at haiku, senryu and other short form poetry. I also provide a resources page and other comment on haiku. You can find some of my published haiku on the Living Haiku Anthology (https://preview.tinyurl.com/y88hqva7) and the Haiku Foundation Haiku Registry (https://preview.tinyurl.com/y9p2ahnl) - Roger Watson
Tuesday, 8 August 2017
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